Sunday, 6 September 2015

My puppy daisy

In High5 we have been practising writing to describe. That means we are trying to get the reader to see what we see, we are using our words to create a picture. We have been adding details to our writing to help make the picture clearer.

Our job is to do this planning and write our own story about a person in our family that is special to us.

Success Criteria:
  • I planned my writing 
  • I added details (what I can seehow my person moveswhat I might hear from my person)
  • I did some fixing by myself
My writing:

How I am going

I planned my writing
Kerri thinks

I added details (what I can seehow my person moveswhat I might hear from my person)
Kerri thinks


I did some fixing by myself
Kerri thinks


My favourite part was: working through it when it was really hard because I wanted to give but Kerri made me carry on. I am really proud of my writing!

It was really hard when: we had to add lots of details and I had no more ideas.

Something that really helped me was: having some quiet time in the office with nobody to talk to. I had some thinking time.

Something new I learned was: I can do it! When it's hard you have to keep on going.

Kerri Thinks
What a great reflection Jamie. This was a very tricky piece of writing for you. I know you found it difficult to come up with lots of ideas, that is why it is improtant to use the planning tools we have in class (move, look, hear...). All that hard work and thinking was woth it, what a great piece of writing you have created. Daisy sounds like a loveable mix of trouble and fun!
Your next learning step is to think about the space where you are writing, is it helping your learning? You are welcome to find a quiet space like the office if it is going to help.

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